浙江省天台中学 汤杰礼
第一部分 读后续写
一、浙江省英语新高考改革简介
二、读后续写定义
三、读后续写评分原则解读金宏柱
《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明》
1. 提供一篇350词以内的材料，要求考生依据材料内容、所给段落开头语及所标关键词续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。 （满分25分） 评分依据 | 考查维度 |
与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度 | 篇章的逻辑和衔接 |
内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词的应用情况 | 情节的推进和融洽 |
应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性 | 语言的丰富和准确 |
| 贺敏仁 上下文的连贯性 | 文章的贯通和流畅玻璃模具 |
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2. 第五档（21—25）融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富，应用了5个及以上短文中标出的关键语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
3. 读后续写评分原则解读
本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档，最后给分。
词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。
评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：
与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
内容的丰富性和对所给关键词的覆盖情况；
应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
上下文的连贯性。
拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的程度予以考虑。
如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次
四、考读后续写的理论依据
五、学生读后续写习作中存在的问题
1. 读：文本解读不到位；
2. 写：与原文融洽度不高，逻辑衔接不够流畅；
词汇意义不清，理解和意义的传达有误；
语言的混搭导致逻辑不清晰；
叙事平铺直叙，语言表达干瘪，人物动作不够生动，人物情绪描写不到位，整体形象不够丰满；
例1
The little boy
A little boy selling 加工工艺magazines for school walked up to a house that people rarely visited. The house was very old and shabby and the owner hardly ever came out. When he did come out, he would not say hello to his neighbors or passers-by but simply just glare at them.
The boy knocked on the door and waited, sweating from fear of the old man. The boy’s parents told him to stay away from the house, and a lot of the other neighborhood children were told the same thing from their parents.
Dust found the boy lingering on and hesitating what to do. As he was ready to walk away, the door slowly opened. “What do you want?” the old man said impatiently. The little boy was very afraid but he had a quota(份额) to meet for school with selling the magazines. So he got up the courage and said, “Uh, sir, I am selling these magazines and uh, I was wondering if you would like to buy one from me.”
The old man just stared at the boy without a word. The boy could see inside the old man’s house and saw that he had dog figurines(小雕像) on the fireplace mantle. “Do you collect dogs?” The little boy asked. “Yes, I have many collections in my house. They are my family here and they are all I have.” The boy then felt sorry for the man, as it seemed that he was a very lonely soul.
“Well, I do have a magazine here for collectors. It is perfect for you. I also have one about dogs since you like dogs so much.” The old man was ready to close the door on the boy and said, “No, boy. I don’t need any magazines of any kind, now goodbye.”
The little boy was sad that he was not going to make his quota with the sale. He was also
sad for the old man being so alone in the house that he owned. The boy went home and then had an idea. He had a little dog figurine that he got some years ago from an aunt. The figurine did not mean nearly as much to him since he had a real live dog and a large family.
例② 2018.06浙江省高考真题
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to h
ave breakfast. "The day starts at dawn on my farm," he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. "Don’t be late for supper," Uncle Paul cried, "and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!" "OK! " my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven(编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.
六、读后续写教学与训练的思维导图
七、读后续写教学与训练建议
中餐宴会摆台主题设计八、《高考英语作文新题型读后续写实践指南》编写思路
第二部分 读后续写
二、概要写作定义
Summary is a short statement that gives the main information about something, without giving all the details.
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