Simpicity

Unit 7 Simplicity (William Zinsser)

I Clutter is the disease of American writing. We are a society strangling in unnecessary

words, circular constructions, pompous frills and meaningless jargon.

2 Who really knows what the average businessman is trying to say in the average

business letter? What member of an insurance or medical plan can decipher the brochure that

tells him what his costs and benefits are? What father or mother can put together a child’s toy -

on Christmas Eve or any other eve – from the instructions on the box? Our national tendency is to

inflate and thereby sound important. The airline pilot who wakes us to announce that he is

presently anticipating experiencing considerable weather wouldn’t dream of saying that there's a

storm ahead and it may get bumpy. The sentence is too simple --there must be something

wrong with it.

3 But the secret of good writing is to strip every sentence to its cleanest components.

Every word that serves no function, every long word that could be a short word, every adverb

which carries the same meaning that is already in the verb, every passive construction that leaves

the reader unsure of who is doing what - these are the thousand and one adulterants that

weaken the strength of a sentence. And they usually occur, ironically, in proportion to

education and rank.

4 During the late 1960's the president of Princeton University wrote a letter to mollify

the alumni after a spell of campus unrest. “You are probably aware," he began,“that we have

been experiencing very considerable potentially explosive expressions of dissatisfaction on issues

only partially related. " He meant that the students had been hassling them about different things.

As an alumnus I was far more upset by the president’s syntax than by the students’ potentially

explosive expressions of dissatisfaction. I would have preferred the presidential approach taken

by Franklin D. Roosevelt when he tried to convert into English his own government’s memos,

such as this blackout order of 1942:

Such preparations shall be made as will completely obscure all Federal buildings and

non-Federal buildings occupied by the Federal government during an air raid for any period of

time from visibility by reason of internal or external illumination.

5 “Tell them," Roosevelt said, “that in buildings where they have to keep the work going

to put something across the windows.”

Simplify, simplify. Thoreau said it, as we are so often re-minded, and no American writer

more consistently practiced what he preached. Open Walden to any page and you will find a man

saying in a plain and orderly way what is on his mind:

I love to be alone. I never found the companion that was so companionable as solitude. We

are for the most part more lonely when we go abroad among men than when we stay in our

chambers. A man thinking or working is always alone, let him be where he will. Solitude is not

measured by the miles of space that intervene between a man and his fellows. The really diligent

student in one of the crowded hives of Cambridge College is as solitary as a dervish in the desert.

6 How can the rest of us achieve such enviable freedom from clutter? The answer is to

clear our heads of clutter. Clear thinking becomes clear writing: one can't exist without the

other. It is impossible for a muddy thinker to write good English. He may get away with it for a

paragraph or two, but soon the reader will be lost, and there is no sin so grave, for he will not

easily be lured back.

7 Who is this elusive creature, the reader? He is a person with an attention span of about

twenty seconds. He is assailed on every side by forces competing for his time: by newspapers

and magazines, by television and radio and stereo, by his wife and children and pets, by his house

and his yard and all the gadgets that he has bought to keep them spruce, and by that most potent

of competitors, sleep. The man snoozing in his chair with an unfinished magazine open on his lap

is a man who is being given too much unnecessary trouble by the writer.

8 It won’t do to say that the snoozing reader is too dumb or too lazy to keep pace with

the train of thought. My sympathies are with him. If a reader is lost, it is generally because the

writer has not been careful enough to keep him on the path.

9 This carelessness can take any number of forms. Perhaps a sentence is so excessively

cluttered that the reader, hacking his way through the verbiage, simply doesn't know what it

means. Perhaps a sentence has been so shoddily constructed that the reader could read it in any

of several ways. Perhaps the writer has switched pronouns in mid-sentence, or has switched

tenses, so the reader loses track of who is talking or when the action took place. Perhaps

Sentence B is not a logical sequel to Sentence A – the writer, in whose head the connection is

clear, has not bothered to provide the missing link. Perhaps the writer has used an important

word incorrectly by not taking the trouble to look it up. He may think that "sanguine" and

"sanguinary" mean the same thing, but the difference is a bloody bid one. The reader can only

infer (speaking of' big differences) what the writer is trying to imply.

10 Faced with these obstacles, the reader is at first a remarkably tenacious bird. He

blames himself - he obviously missed something, and he goes back over the mystifying sentence,

or over the whole paragraph, piecing it out like an ancient rune, making guesses and moving on.

But he won't do this for long. The writer is making him work too hard, and the reader will look for

one who is better at his craft.

11 The writer must therefore constantly ask himself: What am I trying to say'? Surprisingly

often, he doesn't know. Then he must look at what he has written and ask: Have I said it? Is it

clear to someone encountering the subject for the first time? If it's not, it is because some fuzz

has worked its way into the machinery. The clear writer is a person clear-headed enough to see

this stuff for what it is: fuzz.

12 I don't mean that some people are born clear-headed and are therefore natural writers,

whereas others are naturally fuzzy and will never write well. Thinking clearly is a conscious act

that the writer must force upon himself, just as if he were embarking on any other project that

requires logic: adding up a laundry list or doing an algebra problem. Good writing doesn't come

naturally, though most people obviously think it does. The professional writer is forever being

bearded by strangers who say that they'd like to "try a little writing some time” when they retire

from their real profession. Good writing takes self-discipline and, very often, self-knowledge.

13 Many writers, for instance, can't stand to throw any-thing away. Their sentences

are littered with words that mean essentially the same thing and with phrases which make a

point that is implicit in what they have already said. When students give me these littered

sentences I beg them to select from the surfeit of words the few that most precisely fit what they

want to say. Choose one, I plead, from among the three almost identical adjectives. Get rid of

the unnecessary adverbs. Eliminate "in a funny sort of way” and other such qualifiers - they do

no useful work.

14 The students look stricken - I am taking all their wonderful words away. I am only

taking their superfluous words away, leaving what is organic and strong.

15 "But," one of my worst offenders confessed, "I never can get rid of anything -you

should see my room.” (I didn't take him up on the offer. ) "I have two lamps where I only need

one, but I can't decide which one I like better, so I keep them both.” He went on to enumerate

his duplicated or unnecessary objects, and over the weeks ahead I went on throwing away his

duplicated and unnecessary words. By the end of the term - a term that he found acutely painful -

his sentences were clean.

16 "I've had to change my whole approach to writing," he told me. "Now I have to

think before I start every sentence and I have to think about every word.” The very idea amazed

him. Whether his room also looked better I never found out. I suspect that it did.