GRE高分ARGUMENT作文写法分析

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GRE高分ARGUMENT作文写法分析

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GRE高分ARGUMENT作文写法分析

GRE高分Argument作文范文写法分析

实例分析

The following appeared as part of an article in a daily newspaper:

Most companies would agree that as the risk of physical injury

occurring on the job increases, the wages paid to employees should also

increase. Hence it makes financial sense for employers to make the

workplace safer: they could thus reduce their payroll expenses and save

money.

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your

discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of

evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what

questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative

explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can

also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the

argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically

sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its

conclusion.

参考范文

This argument states that it makes financial sense for employers to

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make the workplace safer because by making the workplace safer then

lower wages could be paid to employees. This conclusion is based on the

premise that as the list of physical injury increases, the wages paid to

employees should also increase. However, there are several assumptions

that may not necessarily apply to this argument. For example, the costs

associated with making the workplace safe must outweigh the increased

payroll expenses due to hazardous conditions. Also, one must look at the

plausability of improving the work environment. And finally, because

most companies agree that as the risk of injury increases so will wages

doesn’t necessarily mean that the all companies which have hazardous

work environments agree.

The first issue to be addressed is whether increased labor costs

justify large capital expenditures to improve the work environment.

Clearly one could argue that if making the workplace safe would cost an

exorbitant amount of money in comparison to leaving the workplace as is

and paying slightly increased wages than it would not make sense to

improve the work environment. For example, if making the workplace

safe would cost $100 million versus additional payroll expenses of only

$5,000 per year, it would make financial sense to simply pay the

increased wages. No business or business owner with any sense would

pay all that extra money just to save a couple dollars and improve

employee health and relations. To consider this, a cost benefit analysis

must be made. I also feel that although a cost benefit analysis should be

the determining factor with regard to these decisions making financial

sense, it may not be the determining factor with regard to making social,

moral and ethical sense.

This argument also relies on the idea that companies solely use

financial sense in analysing improving the work environment. This is not

the case. Companies look at other considerations such as the negative

social ramifications of high on-job injuries. For example, Toyota spends

large amounts of money improving its environment because while its goal

is to be profitable, it also prides itself on high employee morale and an

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almost perfectly safe work environment. However, Toyota finds that it

can do both, as by improving employee health and employee relations

they are guaranteed a more motivated staff, and hence a more efficient

staff; this guarantees more money for the business as well as more safety

for the employees.

Finally one must understand that not all work environments can be

made safer. For example, in the case of coal mining, a company only has

limited ways of making the work environment safe. While companies

may be able to ensure some safety precautions, they may not be able to

provide all the safety measures necessary. In other words, a mining

company has limited ability to control the air quality within a coal mine

and therefore it cannot control the risk of employees getting blacklung. In

other words, regardless of the intent of the company, some jobs are

simply dangerous in nature.

In conclusion, while at first it may seem to make financial sense to

improve the safety of the work environment sometimes it truly does not

make financial sense. Furthermore, financial sense may not be the only

issue a company faces. Other types of analyses must be made such as the

social ramifications of an unsafe work environment and the overall ability

of a company to improve that environment (i.e., coal mine). Before any

decision is made, all this things must be considered, not simply the

reduction of payroll expenses.

思路讲解

1. 这篇GRE作文首先在字数高达599words, GRE考试虽然没有对写作提出明确的字数要求，但其评分时偏好字数更多的文章却也是不争的事实。

2. 这篇文章在结构上实行了标准的五段式写法，首段、末端，中间三段，整体结构没有消失头重脚轻的问题，文章平衡性极佳。

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3. 整篇文章在词句运用上极为出彩，没有消失陈词滥调、用词重复或堆砌句子的问题。

范文用法

对于这篇文章，最为错误的用法无疑就是把整篇文章整个吞枣一般死记硬背下来，然后上了考场进行大段默写。假如考生这么做，一个被判雷同抄袭扣甚至取消成果的惩处在所难免。当然大家对于其中一些精彩用词和句子也肯定不能直接照搬，否则同样有肯定风险。正确做法是首先理解文章优势，了解其在规律论述和遣词造句上的精妙之处，然后结合自己的语言对文章进行改良，这样才能最大程度上汲取到这篇文章的精华所在。

GRE高分范文这么用才有收获

看过上面的例子，接下来我就为大家详细介绍GRE高分范文的正确用法。

1. 首先，大家需要对范文的来源进行筛选和甄别。市面上打着高分满分GRE范文幌子的资料许多，但其中有不少是滥竽充数之辈，所选用的文章大多本身质量低劣根本称不上范文。为了避开学习到这些假货反而受到不良影响，大家首先需要到真正高品质的范文资源。一般来说，官方或是权威机构出品的资料里，包含的范文质量较高，比如官方出品的OG指南中，涉及写作部分就有很多真正意义上的高分范文。另外诸如曼哈顿和MAGOOSH之类国外权威考试机构的复习资料中，也有不少优质范文。另外，很多权威教学机构都有自己的在线工具和模考软件，比如上面提到的两家机构，还有官方模考软件PP2，在作文部分都会配置一到两篇高分范文给大家参考，这些文章也是极好的。

2. 其次，范文中的好词妙句大家要消化改写后再使用。就犹如在上文真题实例分析中所说，再好的句子，也肯定没有直接拿来就用的道理，一方面有雷同风险，另一方面每个人的语言用词习惯都有所不同，强行记忆和自己习惯不符的句子很简单消失记忆混淆，背诵错第 4 页/共 10

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误的问题。所以，考生假如看到一些比较优秀的句子，那么不妨在不影响其质量的状况下，依据自身的写作风格稍作一些加工调整，消化汲取后再拿出来用到自己的文章中。

3. 再次，面对优秀范文，切忌整篇文章死记硬背。一个缘由上面说过，简单被判雷同，另一个缘由则是对记忆力消耗太大，每个人的记忆力都是有限的，而GRE作文题目又数量众多，考生假如看到一篇好文章就想要整个背下来，那么无论记性多好都会是件耗时费劲的辛苦活，付出和回报完全不成比例。正确做法是学习这些文章的写作思路。GRE作文Argument是驳论文，要求漏洞发觉规律问题，这是需要肯定技巧的，哪些是主要漏洞，如何绽开驳论的层次层层递进，大家都可以通过范文来进行学习，这也是范文真正的价值所在。

4. 最终，范文中常会使用到一些不错的素材。素材本身可能并不特别，但恰到好处的使用却能够为整篇文章增光添彩。考生不要迷信高分范文里的素材，简洁粗暴地直接背素材，正确做法是学习能够让素材具备说服力的使用方法，比如哪些素材用在什么类型的题目，证明哪些观点时才能发挥最大作用。学会这种素材和题目的搭配才是核心关键。

GRE高分范文错误用法留意要点讲解

最终我要特殊提示大家关于GRE高分范文的常见使用误区。可能有些考生有过这种经受，明明用了高分范文来复习，结果作文成果却不升反降。会消失这种状况，正是由于大家在用法上消失了错误。考生需要特殊留意的范文错误用法主要有两种，上文也有所提及，一个是原文照抄，这是大忌，后果也特别严峻，肯定不能犯这种错误。另一个是思路照搬，看到相像题目不管三七二十始终接套用范文的思路。GRE作文中存在大量形似神异的题目，看起来说的是同一件事，用的事例也相近，但作文的写作要求和侧重点却有很大区分。大家肯定要认真审题后再确定写作思路，切忌直接套用范文的写作套路，一旦消失张冠李戴的状况，最终得分往往会惨不忍睹。

GRE写作高分范文：想法付诸行动的困难性

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It is easy to welcome innovation and accept new ideas. What most

people find difficult, however, is accepting the way these new ideas are

put into practice.

拥护革新和接受新想法很简洁。但是在大多数人们看来，最困难的是接受把这些新想法付诸实现的方式。

GRE写作范文：：

The writer of the issue connotates an ironic phenomenon: though

innovation is required in our era and eulogized by most people,

application of it is clannished vehemently because of the fear of failure

and the possibility of obtained possession and tradition impairing. The

author grasps the paradox psychology of most people and pertinently

reveals a universal mentality.

As is known that innovation may bring big progress and result in

even a revolutionary transition of a society: the elevated efficiency of

work, the ameliorated life, the enticing fruit of new technology and so on.

Following with innovation of the second industrial revolution, great

changes took place and immediately a renewed world unfolded before us

with the application of its fruits. Seeing unimaginable profits and the

magic power, who (including the society and government) can suppress

their agitating desire to restrict development of innovation?

Unfortunately, innovation doesnt always follow the peoples will and

always acts like an uncontroled horse running in the plain. Worrying

about the side-effect, people have to hold their desire back but admire

those who are brave enough to taste crabs for the first time. Not everyone

possesses the same courage as Biil Gates, who dare invest on a fresh field

and give up the chance of studying in Harvard University, which is the

dream of most aggressive young people. Often, pondering what they have

already possessed with what they might get from innovation, most people

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prefer the former to the latter, even content to sacrifice the latter to ensure

the integer of the former. For example, a department may enroll those

who are not very deft in the work but behave complaisant before

higher-ups and deny to those who stick to their innovational opinion

obstinately. After all, it is required more to cooperate with others

harmoniously and conform to the traditional rules nowadays than to creat

a new law according to individual penchant, in any company and

corporation.

Maybe, some one argues that, how to cultivate innovation if

personality should abdicate to interests of collective? Does the statement

above alludes that employees should do nothing but keep silent and

follow what the higher-ups dictated, strangling their inspiration to accord

to the criterion today? No doubt, such supposition is rediculous. I mean

that employees should try to approach their original though to tenet of the

collective, not attempt to disobey the existed norm, respect suggestion

and supposition of others and circumspect the innovation and then discuss

with all the members in the company. That is, responsibility should be

taken before the innovation is applied to practice.

Of course, many people dont have the ability that controling their

compulsion of carrying their innovation into application. It doesnt lack of

people who dare not apply innovation, and people who hold innovational

thought are not scarc either, however,those who possess both of the two

abilities and are lucky enough to encounter a proper opportunity to

release their innovation is very few. The seperation of spirit of application

and creation of innovation is the root of the the strange phenomenon, that

innovation and new ideas are here and there while the acceptance and

combination of them with application is too little to be heard.

GRE写作高分范文：冒险与方案

Success in any realm of life comes more often from taking chances

or risks than from careful and cautious planning.

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在生活的全部领域中，胜利往往更多的来自于把握机会或者冒险而不是通过认真谨慎的方案。

GRE写作范文：

The speaker asserts people are more likely to attain success when

taking chances or risks than planning carefully and cautiously. However,

after comparing the characteristics of careful planning and taking chances,

I strongly hold that they are of the same importance in the pursuit of

success.

In competitive sports, while making appropriate training plans and

effective competition strategies constitute necessary conditions of

winning the matches, taking risks is almost inevitable when athletes or

their coaches confront a sudden matter that might influence the course of

a match and that has not been taken into consideration beforehand. In

modern competitive sports, it is widely acknowledged that scientific and

effective training contributes to athletes’ better performance during

matches. Good competition strategies, on the other hand, resulting in the

better allocation of physical force, better use of skills or the higher rate in

scoring, also play a vital role.

However, when the star players of a soccer team or a basketball team

are off the game or fail to implement their chief coachs strategic intention,

leaving the whole team in adverseness, the coach faces the choice

whether to substitute he/she or not. No doubt substituting a star player

with a bench player means taking risk because the bench player may not

perform as good as the star player and may make matters worse. If this

happens, the substitution will incur discontentment of the players and

critique from the teams fans, media and the boss. The capability of the

coach may then be suspected and he/she may even be fired. Nevertheless,

if the coach dares not to take the risk to substitute a poorly performed star

player, his/her team will probably lose the game. Taking chances and

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risks is reasonable when one is dealing with something that has not been

taken into consideration previously. So, in competitive sports, planning

and risking are both necessary.

In academic fields, careful and cautious planning is required for

large projects and application disciplines while revolutionary scientific

breakthroughs are almost impossible without taking chances or risks.

Before starting the research project on human genome, scientists had

already made plans on the content and method of the research. They did

not have to take any chances or risks because all they should do have

already been carefully planned. There were no technical obstacles that

had not been solved. Therefore, they just followed the plan step by step

and accomplished the project in the end. As for significant scientific

breakthroughs, they are the important discoveries and theories that

disaccord, at least to some extent, with established principles or our

intuitions, such as the Theory of Relativity and quantum mechanics. One

has no choice but to take chances because established theories may not be

applicable on the boundary of what is known and what is unknown. Only

after being examined through experiments, practices and observations,

can they be confirmed or belied. In a word, planning and taking chances

or risks are different means for different levels of academic researches.

In the business world, cautious planning contributes to the long-term

development of a company and at the same time, risking is imperative for

a company to survive, develop and thrive in the highly competitive

society. Planning carefully on inquiring market, training stuff and

manufacturing products ensure a companys long-term development by

keeping its profit increasing or at least not declining. On the other hand,

taking risks, such as incorporating with another company, involving in the

market fields that have already been occupied by other enterprises or

involving in the market fields that are not considered so profitable, is also

necessary because these may save the company from the adversity or help

to set foot in new businesses. Clearly,in the business field, planning and

risking complement each other.

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To conclude, success in any realm of life comes equally from taking

chances or risks and from careful and cautious planning. In most cases,

they complement each other and pave the way towards success.

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